So having completed the first cut I’m now working my way through the second cut.
I’ve completed the first 35 mins, which is probably the toughest part because I need to incorporate some scenes from episodes 4, 5, 6 and 7 that I left out of episode 1.
I’ve uploaded this segment to googledrive. If anyone is keen to watch and offer feedback send me a PM. It’s a second cut so some of the music transitions are incomplete.
What I’ve done with the first act is:
Open on Coruscant and intercut between Syril arriving on Coruscant, Kleya meeting Vel and Dedra briefing Yularen and the ISB… “everyone is looking for Andor”. I then cut straight from Syril looking at Andor’s hologram to Andor arriving on Narkina.
Syril’s mother has been cut from the edit to give Syril a stronger character.
Andor’s first shift on Narkina is intercut with Syril’s first day at the Bureau of Standards. This provides a much better juxtaposition than Mon Mothma’s social gathering.
I then use the nighttime Narkina scene with the time skip to do 2 things.
Firstly to introduce the first of 2 flashback scenes of Cassian’s return to Ferrix shortly after the heist. These were cut from episode 1 because of the effect his return to Ferrix had on the pacing, but his scenes with Maarva are crucial to the plot going forwards and Cassian’s character development.
Secondly, to tie in Cyril’s job at the Bureau of Standards with the time skip, fitting in with Dedra’s lines about his search for Andor.
This puts me back onto the chronological timeline of the series from the midpoint of episode 8 apart from the first meeting of Mon Mothma and Tay, which will be moved to later in the edit.
I have edited Vel and Cinta’s first scene on Ferrix to remove reference to Vel leaving. In this edit Vel will remain on Ferrix. Her trip back to Coruscant and connection to Mon Mothma add nothing to the story.
The second Cassian-Maarva flashback scene is slotted into the scene where Cassian is awoken by the Narking Suicide. Maarva’s references to Cassian’s sister have been cut.