I still hasn’t finished watching (won’t be able to watch it all at once today) but I noticed one little thing that makes the opening text feel very off.
The first line is centered, while the other 3 paragraphs are to the left. Its a little detail maybe but it really “hit” my eyes and made it look very faneditish to me.
The written content itself and its pacing is great, not too long,not too short, more like “Solo”. But still, I really think the format has to be corrected 😉
Once I watch it all, I ll be able to share more insights 😉
Thanks for the feedback. I tried a number of different formats for the crawl - all centered, all left aligned, centred with left aligned. This is the one I thought looked the best. The idea is that the first line is a sort of subtitle to the film title. Then the following three paragraphs are the exposition. I guess I could just combine the first 2 lines and keep it all left aligned if it bothers more people.
I personally think the first line would look better left aligned, although I do like it being a separate paragraph for additional emphasis.
Also, there’s a typo in the text; the first line should say “it’s a dark time,” rather than “its”. Personally, though, I think it would look more Star Wars-y to get rid of the contraction completely: “It is a dark time for the galaxy.”
EDIT: There should also be a comma in the third sentence: “But as the oppression grows, pockets of resistance have started to form.”
Thanks for the input. Corrections made. I’ve gone for centred because the shorter line doesn’t look right with left allignment.
Now rendering new versions with this intro and the rogue frame removed.
Looks great