Interesting idea about the light changing! Something more subtle may be appropriate, since I wouldn’t want to suggest that Rey’s saber goes red.
Fair enough-- I was so invested in the visual symbolism that I didn’t notice how it might be confusing in a literal sense, lol.
NeverarGreat said:
Those are some fair points on the crawl as well. I did try ‘absence’ instead of ‘downfall’, but downfall just sounds more dire and clear that this is a bad thing for the good guys. There are also a lot of ‘s’ sounds on that line. Maybe generalizing the downfall to the plural Jedi would make more sense.
This feels like the best crawl so far to me. The one thing I would suggest is marrying the old ending line with the new. Something like:
“vanquish the shadow now
darkening the stars…”
or
“vanquish the shadow that
now darkens the stars…”
To me this seems like the best of both worlds, and ties into that opening image nicely.