Originally posted by: ADigitalMan
EP III deletions/modifications:
- New Crawl (Darth Editous is once again helping out on this one so many thanks still go to him).
Could you post it? Not a slam, but your titles on your other prequel edits and your crawls were very un-star wars. it read (and still reads) like fanfic.
I'm guessing you're going to go straight from them cutting the hole to them crawling up that shaft, and then to them coming out of the elevator? That'd be nice.
- Rebel Alliance scenes
EP III deletions/modifications:
- New Crawl (Darth Editous is once again helping out on this one so many thanks still go to him).
Could you post it? Not a slam, but your titles on your other prequel edits and your crawls were very un-star wars. it read (and still reads) like fanfic.
- Palpatines's cheesy "Yes"
the one after Obi-Wan takes out the Super Battle Droids? That shit is funny. He's selling it like crazy right there.
This is a good edit. If I may also suggest, chopping out "I should have known the Jedi were plotting to take over!" "Anakin, Palpatine is Evil!" "From my point of view the Jedi are evil" "Well you are lost then!" I find the scene would play much better, dramatically, if you went straight from 'I have failed you, Anakin. I have failed you." into that nice two-shot where they're just sort of swirling around each other right before they start fighting again. You can finesse the music there a lot easier as well. And, for added effect, it makes Anakin more ruthless and almost terminator-like. He's not so much talking as just trying to kill. Maybe, if you're feeling really tricky, moving the "This is the end for you, my master" to before "I have Failed You." but that would necessitate some tricky sound editing.
Deleted stuff added back in
- Shaak Ti's death and escaping from Greivous (sans animatics and trimmed to remove redundancy with bridge scene)
the one after Obi-Wan takes out the Super Battle Droids? That shit is funny. He's selling it like crazy right there.
- Artoo crashing into wall
And every theatrical viewing I saw (3) that shot got one of the biggest, if not the biggest, laugh out of the audience. What's so wrong with that shot? It's the punchline to Anakin's setup, and fits in with the "loose wiring" joke earlier.
that doesn't make any sense. that would paralyze her and leave her unable to speak. She couldn't push. Hearing Anakin snap her vertebrae is a) too much and b) creating a plot inconsistency in an edit where you're trying to remove them.
- "You underestimate my power."
And every theatrical viewing I saw (3) that shot got one of the biggest, if not the biggest, laugh out of the audience. What's so wrong with that shot? It's the punchline to Anakin's setup, and fits in with the "loose wiring" joke earlier.
- Anakin debating with Mace over killing/saving Palpatine.
What's the reasoning for taking that out? It's almost necessary the way both your edit and the actual movie itself is laid out.
- Added bones cracking during the Padme force choke.
What's the reasoning for taking that out? It's almost necessary the way both your edit and the actual movie itself is laid out.
- Added bones cracking during the Padme force choke.
that doesn't make any sense. that would paralyze her and leave her unable to speak. She couldn't push. Hearing Anakin snap her vertebrae is a) too much and b) creating a plot inconsistency in an edit where you're trying to remove them.
- "You underestimate my power."
This is a good edit. If I may also suggest, chopping out "I should have known the Jedi were plotting to take over!" "Anakin, Palpatine is Evil!" "From my point of view the Jedi are evil" "Well you are lost then!" I find the scene would play much better, dramatically, if you went straight from 'I have failed you, Anakin. I have failed you." into that nice two-shot where they're just sort of swirling around each other right before they start fighting again. You can finesse the music there a lot easier as well. And, for added effect, it makes Anakin more ruthless and almost terminator-like. He's not so much talking as just trying to kill. Maybe, if you're feeling really tricky, moving the "This is the end for you, my master" to before "I have Failed You." but that would necessitate some tricky sound editing.
Deleted stuff added back in
- Shaak Ti's death and escaping from Greivous (sans animatics and trimmed to remove redundancy with bridge scene)
I'm guessing you're going to go straight from them cutting the hole to them crawling up that shaft, and then to them coming out of the elevator? That'd be nice.
- Rebel Alliance scenes
If you want to turn the middle of the movie into a TPM style quicksand, sure
ALL of them or just one or two. I think you could get away with the meeting in Palpatine's office pretty easily, but the first two meetings are VERY dry and with all the exposition already in the middle of the movie, it's going to be VERY drawn out. All the other edits you listed are either decent or won't really change anything either way, so it should be an equally unobtrusive viewing experience. The ones above are just some suggestions.