Very poetic, but contradictory! In paragraph 2 the New Republic knows of the sinister First Order, but in paragraph 3 they are unaware of the shadow!

Maybe something like this?

EPISODE VII
THE FORCE AWAKENS

The galaxy is in crisis.
Luke Skywalker, striving
to restore the legendary
Jedi Order, has vanished.

Suspecting this disappearance
to be an act of war, a daring
task force has assembled to
search for the last Jedi within
the domain of the FIRST ORDER,
a mysterious faction armed with
weapons of the fallen Empire.

Leaders of this brave RESISTANCE,
sworn to secrecy by the fragile
New Republic, have sent their
greatest pilot to the planet
of Jakku, unaware of the shadow
now rising to extinguish
the darkening stars…