   then the first scene with her husband which establishes their 
   relationship and references a “dinner”. I’ve then used the “dinner” 
   scene from episode 7 where she recruited her old friend.

I’m curious to see how you arrange this. I’m attempting to do this same thing with my own edit. Moving the recruitment of Tay Kolma up to the first dinner that we never saw in the show, than having Mon Mothma and Luthren’s second meeting, where he asks her “Let me know how the meeting goes.” instead be referring to the Davo Sculdun meeting instead of the one with Tay.

It’s honestly the way it should have been in the show. It’s very weird how they offscreen the first dinner, only to show a completely different one later.