Excited about your progress, but I have some notes.
I appreciate you wanting to eliminate the Krayt side quest, but for me, this doesn’t work. We are randomly on the massive carcass and all of sudden Cobb is thanking Mando. Trying to watch this blind, I’m not sure someone who hasn’t seen the show will understand the exchange.
Also, the color grading is a bit on the hot/overexposed side. For a show that seems to lean hard on Rec.709, maybe try going in another direction, pull back on the highlights maybe.
What are you editing on?
For me it’s not a real problem because on the travel to the carcass Cobb tell it’s story to Mando and where/how he got the armor, by this way he can thanking Mando because he appreciate the fact he doesn’t kill him for that, I hope you’ll understand my point. And the meat carcass can be explain with the “Obi Wan Kenobi” show, it’s not a problem.
Meanway, I think about the possibility of re-insert the original sequence.