I first and foremost want to say that is it really to your credit that you are fixing this movie. Out of the Lucas Star Wars movies, The Phantom Menace was one that I did not believe could be redeemed through editing alone. The entire structure and plot of the film needed fixing.

One thing I will say is that there are other editors using the Australian dub for JarJar. You could consider using that as I find his voice a real nuisance. I could not stand it even the little bit I saw of him in the Hal9000 edit of the movie. I apologize in advance if you heard this already.

I know you said you were possibly making a canon compliant version of the film, and I do know I am one of those in favor of that. However, any improvement in this movie is a welcome addition. Besides, the Lucas Star Wars films were not exactly canon compliant either.

As for the Obi Wan character, I see you plan to have him impatient and aggressive. Does that ever manifest in the form of action, or only words? I say this because in the OT, Kenobi does inform Yoda he was reckless like Luke in his youth. This is also a way to help with his character development demonstrating through action rather than words. I apologize if you already indicated this was part of your plan.