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Post #1495717

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Lifeincontext
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OLD BEN: An Obi-Wan Kenobi Fan Edit [ABANDONED]
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Date created
19-Jul-2022, 6:41 PM

I really love where this is going. IMO, the idea of him going to Diayu really works well.

If I may, a couple thoughts:

  • What if the Leia vision starts coming on him in a couple of flashes while he’s in the streets, then he goes to the warehouse to seek clarity? That way, it bridges the gap a bit.

  • Also, as far as the vision itself goes…this is just a nitpick, but the foley feels a bit too crisp, especially given the effects of how visions are used in the prequels. What about adding a bit of echo? And one last thing…what’s your reasoning for ending the vision on that lingering shot of ROTS Obi? For me, it feels like it would be more fitting to finish the vision either on the babies, Padme, or Anakin, since it’s feels more like the Force is connecting his memories with these events across the galaxy.

  • I’m personally of the opinion that you’re on the right track not bringing Leia in until this point, honestly. It keeps the audience’s perspective with Obi-Wan, and I think that’s actually pretty crucial.

  • The placement of the moment on the star destroyer with the Grand Inquisitor/Vader didn’t quite work for me; would you mind clarifying your rationale for putting it there? I think the knowledge that they were chasing someone was just a bit confusing.

I eagerly await what happens next in your cut! The tone is AWESOME.