ANJO- some brief notes/opinions
brilliant opening. Though IMO you rushed the saloon scene.
I like the cuts to the scene between Owen and Reva, although the inquisitors disappear too quickly. They are suddenly 100 feet away.
Nice rescoring during the landing platform scene.
I kind of liked the Leia dressing down her cousin scene but I get why you cut it.
The bag over Leia’s head is good, but maybe it could be done better? i’m not sure that i would’ve known what happened if i hadn’t watched the original.
I like that you cut OWK pulling his cloak back to show everyone his lightsaber. why on earth would he do that?
I’m conflicted over OWK and the fake jedi, when he says “i’ll do it.” it seems a little off. even though it was played for laughs I actually kind of liked the original version.
Changing the Fortress Inquisitorius entry scene to the fake jedi helping him makes no sense to me. It’s too big. in glancing around the comments i’m really surprised that some people like it. it definitely doesn’t look like a “sewer,” more like what it is, a sea. it doesn’t make sense that there is a sea in one of the underlevels. and to someone like me, who recognizes the Fortress Inquisitorius, it’s soo out of place. Haja’s lines don’t gel either. i would just revert it to the original rescue scenes if nothing else. maybe a little edited somehow.
I would cut out the “granddaughter maybe” line. But maybe leave in the Leia “you think the less you say” line. but that’s just me.
I’m conflicted about the scene where OWK catches Leia. I think the sound effect is unnecessary. I would also leave out the duel on Mustafar flashback and OWK saying “Anakin.” the cut to vader opening his eyes says it all without spelling it out. i think your idea is good one, but it raises some questions. like “is Vader able to sense every time OWK uses the force?”
I would cut ANY mention of Reva knowing who Vader is. In other media Vader has always killed anyone who knew his identity. one of my biggest gripes in the series.
I like how you cut the auto-pilot-trade-route stuff, and had Leia instead asking if OWK could use the force to fix Lola. brilliant.
I liked cutting the stormtroopers questioning Kenobi in the back of the transport. I liked Ewan’s acting there, with the lines about her mother, but it’s not worth the rest of the scene, with the OWK gaff, and the weird alien expressing his distrust of them at the checkpoint, but not earlier?
I wish you could edit the gun out of OWK’s hand, as he’s still pointing it at the stormtroopers when he’s on the ground. that’s mare than the usual stormtrooper ineptitude.
Ok, I love moving the “the years have made you weak Obi-Wan” to the fire scene. I never would have thought of it. It makes the scene make more sense somehow (not make sense necessarily, but MORE sense). Although it’s confusing when he still seems obsessed with finding him a couple scenes later.
The de-aging is VERY well done.
The way Reva tries to sneak attack right when he is distracted is perfect. I wish there was a way to edit the scene with the POV from far behind directly before though, to show her walking up behind him.
I would cut the GI saying that “revenge does wonders for the will to live” line, as it suggests that they know that she will live, and they just let her. but i’m sure they will be making a Reva series soon (sigh).
great job cutting the scene of Haja “protecting” Leia from OWK when she storms off.
I think I like the flashbacks immediately after Vader/Anakin yelling “OBI WAN!” the ending of their duel had a very different feel.
If it were not for Reva speaking Anakin’s name, or ESPECIALLY the “sewer” scene, this would be the edit i would keep. i really don’t mean to sound too critical, you did an amazing job. the best i’ve seen yet, i think by far. if you made a version without the “sewer scene” your edit would be my “chosen one.”
