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Post #1494216

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szopman
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Spence's Obi-Wan Kenobi (V3 Released)
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Date created
11-Jul-2022, 11:53 AM

So I’ve finally sae the V2. Overall - great job. There are things I thing could/should be changed but in generalnl it’s a very Well edited and coherent fanedit, doesnt feel faneditish. It does the job. And I understand you didnt want to alter the official story too much.

So, things I think could be improved:
-The infamous chase scene on Alderaan. I know its a very repetitive feedback but it can really end once we See a suspicious guy in the Forest saying hello. Its well too obvious they re there to kidnap there.
-The running Jedi on Tatooine - I think it can be cit even more - like to cut from Reva igniting the lightsaber directly to the footagr when he’s seen hanging dead in the Town (btw very good job on trimming the first EP).
-Bail convincing Obi-wan. It should be trimmed even more. Obi-wan wouldnt hesitate So much. Maybe the “Phone call” could be cut? Obi-wan shouldnt even be able to contact Bail So easily in the first place. Anyway, we dont need to See him how he enters the spaceship, we can cut directly to him landing On Daimyu.
-The cameo of Temeura should be reinserted 😭
-btw, not necesary for the story, but would be nice to See how Leia disses her cousin.
-I think we could have even less Haja 😉

“When Leia tells her father that “she’s not a real Organa”, we no longer have the context of it being something Leia was told by her cousin that she internalized. In this new context, it seems like it was Leia’s original thought, which imo doesn’t quite add up. I personally don’t mind Leia’s precocious reading of her cousin because I interpreted it as an example of her latent Force ability. I wonder if there’s any way you could reinstate some of that scene, at least enough to get the original context of the line back”

Maybe you are right about this one, but on the other hand, I forgot that it all started with the cousin being mean and it didnt feel off when I was watching the edit. Anyway, The whole Leia dissing her cousin scene was great.

“In Fortress Inquisitorius, Tala says something to the effect of “what are they hiding down there” but we no longer have the payoff of the Jedi tomb scene. I would just trim this line out if possible”
+1

And, I loved rescoring and all the trimming. And you improved soo soo much the Episode 3.