Alterations:
- Cut 2 min 40 seconds from Mapuso (as suggested above). It does indeed lose some momentum, and the pace of removing the Stormtroopers taking extreme interest in Obi-Wan and Leia and all that (although a good enough scene in its own merit) does increase the flow a lot and help in the film structure.
- Reeva does now throw the knife (again), and THEN the Jedi (Nari) run like it is presented in my edit (as suggested by GLogus).
- Cut Reeva landing in her own, private ship with the Stormtroopers on Jabiim. Instead, she simply has arrived WITH her troops - and the bombardment and shooting of the Rebel Door is all increasingly dramatic and better paced, as to not waste too much time on silly shananigans (me).
- The Laser Gate on Dayiu is instantly shot at by Obi-Wan, and instantly opens. This doesn’t make the Laser Gate seem like this giant obstacle that it does in the series/film. Obi-Wan (and Anakin) used to shoot door panels all throughout the series, so this is totally in character and should actually work as a homeage of sorts (Glogus and me).
- Smoothen out audio transition with Reeva talking to her thugs (as suggested by GLogus), as some might find it confusing.
- Cut the line “The Jedi hunt themselfes” from Reeva speaking to her thugs, as I cut the Grand Inquisitor’s delivery of the line on Tattooine (this I actually had forgotten about, thank you, Glogus).
- Smoothen Haja and Obi-Wan conversation before The Alternate Rescue.
- Restructured the way Tala executes her own Stormtroopers (the original is weird af i realized). Now I feel it truly works.
- Smoothened some audio transition over the place
Things that will NOT be changed (that’s not mentioned up above):
- The ending (Luke and Owen, Qui-Gon)
- The line “So have you come to kill me?”. It doesn’t work without it I feel, because they just instantly attack one another, and also - Obi-Wan came down to the planet to FIGHT HIM. So, it does work.
- Probably anything else mentioned that is not mentioned up above (but i’ve probably forgotten stuff, so ask me if you’re confused or curious).
(Not going to render just yet - waiting to see if there’s something I’ve forgotten)
Wow, that was fast! I’m looking forward to the new version. By the way, the sequence where Darth Vader brings down the ship is SOOO much better.