This edit is shaping up to be a really terrific interpretation of the Obi-Wan story! I can’t wait for its release!

Having watched the preview with the Inquisitors, I found the sudden appearance of the Grand Inquisitor in the saloon too abrupt - jarringly so. Also, the spatial logic of our characters’ placement becomes confused; we see the ship’s shadow pass over Obi-Wan’s face, and yet we then have cutaways to Obi-Wan during the confrontation in the saloon implying that he can see these events. But given the lack of any establishing shot that places Obi-Wan near the saloon, and the ship’s shadow implying that Obi-Wan is further away from the saloon (as the ship did not park straight outside), it feels very odd and unnatural to this viewer.

My suggestion would be:

1.) Retain the Inquisitors’ march from the ship to the saloon; it serves as an effective introduction to these characters, and the slower pace that it creates is more in-keeping with the BB/BCS sensibility.
2.) Remove all Owen and Ben cutaways during the saloon confrontation. These feel clumsy and introduce spatial illogic; besides, when we cut to Owen and Ben looking up at the hanged Jedi afterwards, and when Owen says to Ben to “keep his distance” (genius!), we gain their observations on the saloon events here and achieve all that we need in terms of character motivation.
3.) Allow the Grand Inquisitor’s speech to play out in full (again, very in-keeping with BB/BCS) before cutting away when Reva kills the fugitive Jedi (a master stroke!).

Just my two cents; this edit really is going to be something special though, the editing choices are incredibly clever (love the new opening, and the transition from the toy being gifted to the toy being thrown back at Obi-Wan - really great stuff!).