Damn, it’s crazy how much the descoring and rescoring has changed the tone of this series. I’m sure all the foley you’re having to do can be exhausting, but I promise you it is paying off. I think a lot of your new music selections are an improvement. The only one that stood out to me was hearing the Across the Stars motif during Leia’s rescue. I know the idea is probably because she is Anakin and Padmé’s kid, but I’ve just always associated the song with romance, so it doesn’t really work for me there. Could Leia’s motif potentially fit there instead?
I wonder if it would be possible to imply that more time has passed when we see Ben meditating on the ship, and not that he got an alert that Leia was in danger as soon as he was off world. Perhaps fading out as he walks toward the ship rather than a hard cut could help suggest that. And/or potentially a shot of a transport ship flying through space? Or maybe a brand new shot to show he is chilling in a warehouse on some totally different planet. Just something to show that a little time has passed.
I think using a shot from Rebels is interesting, and I think you could potentially get away with it (especially if the footage was more shaky and scratchy, perhaps, through the view screen). I do think you might need VFX to address how we don’t see the sun in one shot, then see it in the binoculars, but then don’t see it in the next shot. I do like what you’re trying to do with this scene though.
I don’t think you need the scene with Obi and the Jawa. It flows nicely as-is imo.
What you’ve done with the Inquisitors showing up on Tatooine is really cool! I have some notes I could give on that to maybe help make it work more, but I can hold off on that for now. I think this is a cool direction to go in though. I wonder if you cut the close up shot of the Jedi hanging. With his new “death” and the shot of his feet hanging combined with the new creepy Inquisitor music, I think not seeing the damage is better than seeing his body hanging there relatively unscathed. I think you can get away with the wide shot of their ship flying off though.
I wonder if in Obi’s Leia vision, one of the last shots we could see is Daiyu or something, or hear one of the kidnappers say, “Set course for Daiyu.” I agree with your Luke/Bespin comparison, but Luke did still see Bespin at least. But I guess Obi could’ve seen it off screen too? Idk just a thought.
I think the overall structure is working well so far. A part of me does wonder if I miss a bit more of Leia’s introduction, but I may be biased a little bit. I did realize you run into a question of why the kidnappers set up a dummy hostage, if there plan was no longer to capture her rescuer, but maybe that was just a safety measure they take with all of their hostages? I personally think the muffled Leia line works by the way.
I also wonder if it is fine that Obi and Bail have no contact after he senses Leia in danger. Like, could you potentially have voiceover of Bail as Obi-Wan arrives at Daiyu, implying they communicated after Obi-Wan sensed Leia.
I might have more thoughts later, but pretty cool so far!