Love everything you said in response, Eddie!

Yes, the additional Qui-Gon bits totally help increase his presence, and it adds to the sense that he is guiding them through this.

Could you just push that line “Trust in the Force” to the shot of Obi-Wan walking with the Daughter? I think I recall that line not being totally necessary for the previous scene, but it benefits Obi-Wan’s lack of questioning.

I think “Take only what you take with you” line does work, but it might be worth playing with alternatives. Maybe cobble together Anakin saying something like, “What’s there?”
“Trust only what you take with you” is fine but you lose some of that meaning that I interpreted, which I thought was nice.
Another potential line you could cobble together could be, “Take only what is with you”, just would need to source that “is” sound.

Didn’t notice the secret line! Nice touch, I’m glad I came to a similar conclusion.

Oh, another suggestion! I wonder if you could squeeze in Ahsoka saying, “Master!” when Anakin wakes up. And before Obi asks if he’s alright. I guess it was just weird Ahsoka didn’t say anything to Anakin after he helped save her. It is one of those things that still works because we’re in dream world. Generally all of my suggestions fall into that category. I do agree that the red saber idea or having a Obi-Wan like during the white out are not necessary. The transitions I brought up might benefit from extension, but I watched it with my dad and we didn’t notice and editing issues.