So, I read all your brilliant feedback and decided to do another crack at the rescue entry:
(I’ll do some more recomposing on Leia now - glad to hear it’s very close to fully working for most)
This is fantastic, it feels much less jarring, and the sense of movement imo helps sell Haja a bit better, since we don’t get the resolution to him considering betraying Obi-Wan with this cut. Spacing out the dialogue slightly through the establishing shots, like you’ve done here, mitigates the untrustworthiness in his delivery when Obi-Wan has him at blaster-point
Cheers, brother. This is how I feel as well. I’ll make the voiceover start a tad quicker tho as suggested above.
Maybe make the voiceover start earlier during the new shots. That will reduce the weirdness of the headset being used underwater.
Also consider cutting the line right afterwards about taking a short break. What kind of support takes a break during the middle of the dangerous operation?
Haja.
Hehe. Good suggestion.
So, I read all your brilliant feedback and decided to do another crack at the rescue entry:
(I’ll do some more recomposing on Leia now - glad to hear it’s very close to fully working for most)
Sorry we keep sticking on this one scene. 1. Love the elevator up front and the inclusion of command center screen. 2. I think I like the other elevator better, feels less “sci-if”. Did you try it recolored and in reverse? (It’s not bad, just missing that Star Wars “grit”)
I did try it, but 1: the shot is way too low res - and 2: it looks too fake imo.
If I could get a better quality version to work with, then perhaps!