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Post #1490603

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Tattooined-OB1
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KENOBI: A STAR WARS STORY [The Radical "Help Me Obi-Wan Kenobi" Cut]
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26-Jun-2022, 4:29 PM

@Anjohan: I’m looking so forward to your edit(s), I cannot tell. All your alterations make more sense then the original edit.

Here some ideas of mine:

The last duel:

  • Will you keep the line of Vader saying: “Did you come to defeat me?”, it was him following Obi Wan, wasn’t it? So IMO it makes not much sense .
  • Obi Wan makes three rolls in the whole duel. One would be enough
  • Obi Wan holds his lightsaber two-handed behind his back and waits long enough until Vader hits him in the face. Is that, what a Jedi would do?
  • Vader using the force to crack the ground and burying Obi Wan with rocks is also a little too much, why is there hollow ground anyway? Obi Wan could have some flashbacks of Luke, Anakin, Padme (Leia, too, if needed) during the fight to gain his full strength again, the burying is not necessary.
  • Maybe Obi Wan saying: “Goodbye, Darth!” is a little too cheesy?

The Inquisitors:

  • Let Reva don’t talk at all! Would make her more threatening than always yelling around.

Take all the time you need to make the edit you want to make.