I’ve just had a look at the scene from ROTS about Qui-Gon, and it actually works fine if Obi-Wan’s already somewhat aware, because the way he delivers the line ‘Qui-Gon!’ feels as if he’s receiving confirmation of something he already suspected. Yoda confirms he’s ‘returned from the netherworld’ but then his focus is on teaching Obi-Wan to commune with him. So as long as it’s not completely explicit that Qui-Gon’s behind things in Clone Wars, it works.

A couple of other thoughts: I might try to more dramatically intersplice the scene of Anakin/OWK/Ahsoka fighting with Daughter/Son/Father, to have the metaphor-people’s actions happen with corresponding actions from the real people. In this scenario, Ahsoka is paired to Son, Obi-Wan is paired to Daughter, and Anakin is paired to Father, so ideally I’d do something like showing Son attack Daughter as Ahsoka attacks Obi-Wan, and vice versa, and have Father intervene when Anakin makes some move.

I also think the better placement for Anakin talking to Qui-Gon is later, after Obi-Wan’s had his Qui-Gon conversation, since the latter duo have the stronger bond, and this way Qui-Gon can also be warning Anakin that he’s heading toward the darkness of the Ahsoka fight (whereas in the original placement he’s heading toward balance).

Just to manage expectations, this episode will take a little while! The reordering of scenes should be no trouble, but I’ve got to do a lot of digging through voice lines, and if I want to extend Father’s conversation at the end and make something out of it, that scene could take a lot of iteration to not feel choppy. I’ve got a busy work week this week, but am more free next week.