So, Mortis is going to be a complex episode that’ll take a lot of thought. I’ve been talking for the last eighteen months about how I want it to be less explicit, less on the nose, less demistifying. I’ll do at least a couple of reviews of the existing content, and discuss my ideas here with you guys, before putting pen to paper.

If anyone feels like rewatching those episodes, or at least sharing your own thoughts/preferences/ideas, that’d be very welcome.

The ideal goal here, I think, is making it essentially a shared vision sequence like Luke in the Dagobah cave, only shared between three people, and longer.

I’ll preserve the appearance of Father, Daughter, and Son, though be less explicit about what they are - them being the personifications of light, dark, and balance, just feels way too explicit. It’d be better if they’re left a bit mysterious, perhaps as metaphors as part of the force vision, only lightly hinting at something more, which’ll become a little more curious and interesting when we see their mural in Rebels.

Looking over my thoughts and your comments in this thread so far, some notes to kick us off:

Qui-Gon appears ‘in person’ in this arc, and I’ve also got some un-used voice lines from the Tartakovsky vision cave sequence which might add some interesting layers here - maybe this is the ‘first contact’ from Qui-Gon from the living force. “You must be tested.” “Trust in the force.” “Anakin, it calls to you.”, etc.
In the original arc they’re called by an ancient ‘tracking signal’, but in the crawl I might make it more explicit that it’s somehow related to Qui-Gon.
I’d like to avoid the diamond-shaped planet being so explicitly a thing - I’d rather that they simply transition into the world as if through sleep.
I’ll keep some of Anakin’s visions near the end, but without showing the Vader Mask - I might replace that with a shot of Anakin and Obi-Wan clashing from this, though we’ll see if I can manage the visual work that’d need.
I should keep Morai, which means preserving Anakin healing Ahsoka, but I’d like to do that in a way that avoids as much of the family drama as possible. I might add VO of Palpatine saying “use the force to create life” here, too. Perhaps I should use the crawl to make Anakin’s connection to her (and that strong connections are discouraged by the Jedi) more explicit, to hint that this might not be a positive.
I might END the whole thing with the mind wipe, if possible, so the whole thing remains more residual and dreamlike. Yoda and Anakin do talk about Mortis later, but I’d rather have that imply that only a little of the Mortis vision has been remembered.
We don’t need to escape the planet only to return to it again an episode later. I’ll smooth out a lot of that.
I’ll minimise a good amount of the family drama - as much as possible to keep them mysterious while keeping the adventure significant to the main characters.