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VVPizza
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KENOBI: A STAR WARS STORY [The Radical "Help Me Obi-Wan Kenobi" Cut]
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16-Jun-2022, 1:10 AM

Anjohan said:

Good to hear, guys. Then we’ll keep it that way.

Second attempt at the line WITH Obi-Wan added. If the “Obi-Wan” still feels out of place I can remove it. To me the line feels more complete with it, but to each their own.

https://streamable.com/uv5jsn

Honestly, the problem I have is that that line reading of “Obi-Wan” in the episode feels a little off. It’s one of the moments the AI voice processing stands out more to me than usual.
For this edit though, it might help to space the “Obi-Wan” out a little further from the rest of the sentence. Probably not as long a pause as the previous version, since the reading is faster, but somewhere in the middle.
I agree that the scene plays better with Vader’s motivation made clearer like this, good stuff.

Second update:

Also, this is a scene i did after ep 2, and the intention is to build The Force theme throughout the film. It starts very light and unfinished, and by the time Obi-Wan becomes his former self the theme grows stronger with him.

This is also the first time in the film I use a Prequel score, to build some suspense and adventure as Obi-Wan embarks on his new oath to protect the second child (35th minute in film structure).

https://streamable.com/6wnzw2

Love this rescore and cut too, great work.