I appreciate the rescoring so far but there are two things that stand out.

The burst of “Duel of The Fates” when she fires does not fit.
When Obi’s leaving “The Force” theme’s integration feels a little thrown in, maybe if its a bit extended with the shot of him walking towards the ship or at least given time to breath a bit before the next score, that might work. Another possibility might be to use another source of the force theme.

An alternate source can be found here that integrates a previous rendition of Obi’s theme from ANH: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qStbSfFK9b0&ab_channel=EverythingStarWars

As for editing

I think in Acbagel’s cut the single shot piercing the storm trooper and igniting the barrels flows better and gives the action a lot more surprise/justification (not to mention bad ass skill) for Vader’s hesitancy. I agree that “the putting the fire out/reusing shots” feels a bit like a stretch, but with a bit more trimming there can almost be equal parts surprise and actual decision to let him go on Vader’s part.
In the shot of Obi arriving on the city planet there are sith whispers for some reason. I’m not sure why or what the reasoning is for them.

I AM LOVING the score of Obi burning to the score of Ani burning, I got a bit emotional just watching that small segment. I can only imagine how much better it will flow with the whole thing.

P.S. Ever since I started watching this show I wanted to hear a very particular theme for Obi-wan that has always without fail given me chills. The small motif at the beginning of The Force theme has been used in the Originals of course but also in Rebels to signify Obi-wan.

Maybe take a look and see if you feel it fits in at some points, I certainly feel like it would evoke the feeling of Obi wan on Tatooine beginning his journey into Alec Guinness.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=eb2zuegwcwk&ab_channel=JorahtheAndal

P.P.S. Here are all renditions of the force theme so far: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=HkWjppI1SiM&ab_channel=StarWarsOpinion