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Post #1488010

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Anjohan
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KENOBI: A STAR WARS STORY [The Radical "Help Me Obi-Wan Kenobi" Cut]
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Date created
9-Jun-2022, 5:25 PM

revel911 said:

leftshoe18 said:

Anjohan said:

Video Update

https://streamable.com/uukjme

Tell me if you think this works. I did some re-editing to make the droid save Obi-Wan quicker, as suggested by Acbagel, and then re-structured the line (that i actually had removed from earlier) “The years have made you weak” with a slowed-down and disappoined “Obi-Wan” at the end of it. The purpose is to almost make Vader give up an immediate hunt because he is disappointed - but without it feeling to on the nose with something like “Escape. I will find you” or some clichè line you’ve heard in countless films and series.

I like this but I think you should cut the “obi-wan” out of Vader’s final words there simply ending on “weak”

The Obi-Wan on the end makes it feel very stitched together.

Or put Obiwan at the beginning

Could try that. I’ll see if it sounds better, or just remove Obi-Wan altogether. I could also make the “Obi-Wan” come in a tad quicker.