No prob! Maybe once you drop a work print people may have some suggestions for things that could be added back in. Sometimes less is more, and I think it works for this situation. If anything, you could quick flashes of Fennic going in and out of consciousness if you wanted to show glimpses of her being rescued by Boba (but maybe use daytime shots with Boba’s spur sound effect), and quick shots inside the mod parlor, but I don’t think that is totally necessary.
I actually think it turned out quite well with the surprise reveal. It was a good idea and as far as I can tell, it doesn’t appear that any other context is necessary to beef it up.
Also wanted to say that I like how you are reframing the stories as well. Like you mentioned, it seems like the main Mandalorian story is moving toward the reformation of the Mandalorian culture. And someone, whether it be Din, Boba, or someone else, will become the new Mandalore. It definitely feels like Boba will play a role in that in some shape or form, so it makes sense to also include his story within this series. I like The Book of Mandalore as a title.
Thank you, I’m going to try to create a The Book of Mandalore title graphic akin to The Mandalorian one at some point to swap out during the logo cuts.
Something that could benefit from this idea is the weird decision to reunite Grogu and Din within the Book of Boba Fett. I know others are basically trying to take the Mando stuff from the Book of Boba Fett and turn it into basically The Mandalorian Season 3, Episode 0. I think that works too, but with how the stories are intertwined, this series might make that story choice work in the best possible way. A part of me is tempted to suggest putting a title card somewhere that says “Six months later” or “One year later” to imply that Mando and Grogu have been apart for some time before being reunited.
I am also hoping that is the case once I reach that point in the story, but I suppose I won’t find out until I get there! Seeing the Din/Boba stories intertwined should help them feel more like co-protagonists so we don’t get that awkward “Wait why is the Mandalorian suddenly the star of Boba’s show?” feeling.
Also wanted to say I love how you trimmed the prologue! Good job with that.
Thank you, I thought it was a good balance of my overall goal for this project, keep enough content in to nail every key character arc but also cut out the fluff scenes that are only in there for the sake of “simple entertainment” ie the lake monster.
There’s one word I’d use to describe this edit, seamless. This edit is almost completely seamless, I had to check the cut list a few times to see what you did, which in my book means you succeeded! As much as I love Smudger’s compressed version of Mando’s story, I feel like yours will be more of a deep dive while still removing the fluff. I like that you used Chapter 6, it reinforces that Mando has a moral code that other Bounty hunters don’t and it sets up the future with Miggs Mayfield. Chapter 6 also expands upon Star Wars lore, giving us a better look at the New Republic, their uniforms, and that X-Wings are still in play. However, I do have a question about the credits, are you going to add the text later? Overall great work as always and I’m looking foward to Chapter 2!
Wow, thanks for the review! I honestly wasn’t expecting it to turn out that well to start as I haven’t even sat down and watched it start to finish myself yet, but that sounds like a solid platform to build upon. Yes, I’m going to go back through all of the intro cards & credits at some point to unify how that is presented. Just wanted to tackle the story aspects first and then I’ll loop back around for any other technical edits.
Will send out links to the others. Going to start on Chapter 3 today, this is a strange one as I’ll be making the jump from Season 1 to Season 2 within the same movie. I have some ideas for how to make this happen but we will see how it pans out.