No prob! Maybe once you drop a work print people may have some suggestions for things that could be added back in. Sometimes less is more, and I think it works for this situation. If anything, you could quick flashes of Fennic going in and out of consciousness if you wanted to show glimpses of her being rescued by Boba (but maybe use daytime shots with Boba’s spur sound effect), and quick shots inside the mod parlor, but I don’t think that is totally necessary.

Also wanted to say that I like how you are reframing the stories as well. Like you mentioned, it seems like the main Mandalorian story is moving toward the reformation of the Mandalorian culture. And someone, whether it be Din, Boba, or someone else, will become the new Mandalore. It definitely feels like Boba will play a role in that in some shape or form, so it makes sense to also include his story within this series. I like The Book of Mandalore as a title.

Something that could benefit from this idea is the weird decision to reunite Grogu and Din within the Book of Boba Fett. I know others are basically trying to take the Mando stuff from the Book of Boba Fett and turn it into basically The Mandalorian Season 3, Episode 0. I think that works too, but with how the stories are intertwined, this series might make that story choice work in the best possible way. A part of me is tempted to suggest putting a title card somewhere that says “Six months later” or “One year later” to imply that Mando and Grogu have been apart for some time before being reunited.

Also wanted to say I love how you trimmed the prologue! Good job with that.