All good points! Kylo’s line getting cut off when sensing Han sounds fine to me, but several people have identified it as an editing mistake even though I didn’t change it at all for V1. This time I figured he would say his entire line so people don’t get confused.

I did intend the dialogue to be a bit funny, but it could be more mission-oriented.

Since the scene of Rey looking startled comes right before this, perhaps I could place the sound effect of a blast door closing. Then:

“Sir, prison level is on lockdown, and Phasma’s troops are searching every cell. Is she that dangerous?”

This could fix a lot of issues. It separates Phasma from her troops and relocates these forces in a locked-down area, shows that Rey has already escaped this area, gives Finn justification for believing that Phasma’s troops won’t bother them, and gives him a reason to be scared when he finally does attempt to blow up the blast door leading to the prison block.