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Post #1483515

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RogueLeader
Parent topic
The Force Awakens: Starlight (V1.1 Released!)
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Date created
9-May-2022, 2:15 PM

I like that. In this case establishing a time frame for the fleet to arrive helps add to the stakes of the situation.

Nitpicks, but I would also try different wordings of the last sentence.

“They’ll launch within the hour.”
“They’re launching within the hour.”
“They expect to launch within the hour.”