That’s an interesting take! Because I’m obsessed with crawl-writing, I took a stab at your new idea, although somewhat different. I think it is good to establish the First Order as a threat off the bat, especially given the Jakku village scene that kicks off the film.
Hopefully you like it 🤷♂️
Episode VII
THE FORCE AWAKENS
Luke Skywalker has vanished!
In his absence, the peaceful
New Republic is in chaos,
countless attacks have been
made by an Imperial remnant
known as the FIRST ORDER.
In a surprising move, these
sinister agents have promised
to end the fighting on the
condition that the Jedi
are finally declared extinct.
General Leia Organa, skeptical
of this offering, has secretly
organized a RESISTANCE to
investigate this threat, and
to find her brother amidst
the darking stars…