They’re all good crawls, y’all. It’s just that there are a ton of restraints on the crawl that need to be taken into consideration, or rather, things that I feel are important to a nice-looking crawl.

For example, there are only about 25 characters (including spaces) to work with on each line. ‘Jedi Knights, has vanished.’ is 27 characters, but that’s pushing it.

The number of lines is also important for the timing of the crawl to sync up with the music. I’ve found that a 4 line, 9 line, 8 line crawl is optimal.

So the thing is, these crawls while good largely won’t work with my constraints. that’s what makes it so challenging, as flowing sentences often become unworkable due to word length.

JEDIT: Here’s what I’m working with right now:

It is a time of despair.
Luke Skywalker, striving
to restore the legendary
Jedi Knights, has vanished.

In his absence, legions
of brutal warriors under
the command of the
IMPERIAL FIRST ORDER
have emerged from a
mysterious hidden base
to terrorize star systems
throughout the peaceful
New Republic.

Overwhelmed by chaos,
several members of the
bitterly divided Senate
have secretly called upon
a daring RESISTANCE
to find the last Jedi and
restore peace and justice
to the darkening stars…