I kind of would like to see a hybrid between my version and Spence’s. Like the structure/pacing of Spence’s version, but with some of the dialogue choices from my version.

It would be optional, but it would be nice if there was just enough for a hint of a motivation for why Rey would even want to join the dark side.

Optional change: “I pushed you in the desert because I needed you to see it. The power of the dark side.”

Optional change: “You need power to protect them” or “You need it to keep them safe” put that line around where I have it.

Because as I have it now, the additional visions of her friends feel superfluous, and it makes what happens in the future sort of confusing. Do her friends die? Or does Rey kill Palpatine and save her friends? Are there two different visions? So just a line or two about needing power to protect her friends might be enough to establish that idea, especially if you change the earlier scene so Rey doesn’t use lightning and “kill” Chewie.

To set up that Kylo has something dramatic to reveal to Rey, I think you could just put back Kylo’s line “You don’t know the whole story” and then when it cuts to that close up of Kylo, he could say, “But I do” or “But I’ve seen it” or “But I know”

Anyway, those last two changes would be enough to set that idea up in Spence’s version of the scene.