A few more changes I have implemented based on feedback:

Created Leia’s early death using footage of Kylo Ren from a deleted TLJ scene. His scenes reforming the helmet are now placed more naturally in the story to help the early pacing.
Removed D-O’s line “sad” when 3PO decides to sacrifice his memories. It’s a nice scene that’s undercut by the joke line.
Re-inserted the scene where the Falcon is brought back to the Star Destroyer and Palpatine communes with Kylo, since I don’t need the footage from that for Leia’s death anymore.
Removed the second time Rey mind tricks the stormtroopers. It’s now just the first interaction, followed by “does she do that to us?”
Added back in Finn and Poe’s argument on Endor. Still trying to make it so Finn says “and so did Leia” as opposed to “and so does Leia”.
Flipped Kylo’s redemption and Rey with Luke for continuity. She’s on Ach-To for a while, so it doesn’t make sense for him to still be standing in the exact same spot for a whole day. This also puts their “throwing away the saber” moments closer together for impact.
Palpatine mentions Rey’s “weak” parents, but it’s framed as a dig at her as opposed to him actually knowing them.
Rey now says “I’m a Jedi” instead of “I am all the Jedi”.