Cute little thing I hadn’t noticed before: Panaka addresses Padmé’s two squads as “red group, blue group”, which is the colour of the laser pointers they use to silently communicate with each other during the street fight.

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Anyway, I did another pass on my ending test, again built on Snooker’s recently shared version, mostly with some dialogue switching. (Hope that’s OK, Snook!)

Added Gunray’s “I want droidekas up here at once!” from the opening scenes. Droidekas are the only things we’ve seen the Jedi having trouble with, and it helps sell Gunray as both fearful and resourceful, among the other reasons I mentioned above.
Added Jar Jar (offscreen, so it could be any Gungan) shouting “Retreat! Retreat!” after Tarpals whistles and starts the retreat, to make it more explicit that’s what’s happening.
Moved Anakin’s “Qui-Gon told me to stay in this cockpit, so that’s what I’m going to do” (from when R2 in space tells him to turn back) to the hangar, to show him making the decision to actively help and exploit a loophole (classic Anakin). This also helps smooth over both Snooker’s and Hal’s version, where his lips move a little as he’s starting to pilot the ship, but no dialogue is heard.
Added Anakin’s “we have to do something” (from the earlier hangar scene) to turn it into his response to R2 in space telling him to turn back - now he’s clearly stating that he’s actively decided to help in space.
Removed Anakin’s “I’ll try spinning, that’s a good trick”, and instead moved his actions in that scene (of turning the controls then his ship spinning) to be the thing he does when he’s got enemies on his tail and after he says “I know we’re in trouble, hang on!” This makes him a bit more of a natural pilot, and gets rid of the silly voice line.
Put the ending back to Anakin destroys ship > Gungans celebrate > Padmé captures Gunray > Obi-Wan defeats Maul > Qui-Gon’s death scene, so you guys can see how it works compared to the earlier version.

I’m sure others have made these edits before, but I haven’t seen every fan version!

(This version slightly offsets the audio in Qui-Gon’s death scene by mistake, but it’s the last scene in this clip so it doesn’t interrupt your emotional flow for the sake of this test, so I’ll leave it for now.)

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Now I’m looking at it in a bit more detail, I’m not sure if having Qui-Gon pull a “use the force, Luke” on Anakin would quite work. You could only really do it when Qui-Gon is meditating, dying (a bit of a stretch), or dead. And practically he’d intervene to either encourage Anakin to fly up to space or to focus while he’s up there.

He can’t really encourage Anakin to get started since it seems like it’s against his earlier instructions, and it’s stronger for Anakin if that decision is his own. And when Qui-Gon’s meditating, Anakin’s in the middle of combat and I don’t think he really has any footage we could use as a ‘focus’ moment.

The only real option, I think, would be to have Qui-Gon meditating tie in with Anakin when he’s powerless in the hangar. But ideally it wouldn’t lead right into Anakin then blowing up the ship, because that triggers the cascading happy endings and splitting them around the long sequence of [Qui-Gon fight, Qui-Gon defeat, Obi-Wan victory, and Qui-Gon death scene] would mean you had far too much Maul combat to get through to hit all those highs at the right audience energy level.

That said, probably your best Qui-Gon lines would be those from Tartakovsky Clone Wars:
“Anakin, it calls to you. Control your fear. Trust in the force.”

“Anakin, it calls to you” can be taken as Qui-Gon noticing in this moment quite how connected to the force Anakin is, and helps show why Qui-Gon is now supporting his actions.
“Control your fear” is a key lesson for Anakin, and helps show why the council might now accept his training despite sensing much fear in him earlier.
“Trust in the force” is his “use the force, Luke” instruction.