Then the ending, featuring the turn, and victory:
3. Obi-Wan’s being taunted by Maul’s sparks, but jumps up and bisects him. Hope for the Obi-Wan plot
4. Padmé’s team capture Gunray. Mission victory comes LAST, so we don’t get the high while Obi-Wan’s still in trouble.
5. Back to Obi-Wan, for Qui-Gon’s death scene. *Now that the mission is complete, we see the cost of victory."
6. Endings.
I understood what you meant to do with 4 and 5, but personally watching the clip, I think that the sequence would flow better with 3, 5 and 4. Cut to a brief scene of ten seconds, just to return to the exact same moment where we are before, got weird for me. Besides that, I think that the whole clip flowed really smooth, I couldn’t even tell what was edited and what wasn’t, you did a really good job with it.