This is my attempt at it so far, if you care to take a look. I included the surrounding scenes because the Leia stuff doesn’t happen here now.
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1xyqd6_NTFkYfmhuFUgBT_w64YZTk4UdL/view?usp=sharing
Yeah, that works.
I would have loved it if this scene has had some more weight to it, like being the third lesson Luke was owing Rey from VIII. But there is just not much to work with.Under those circumstances, your take seems to be the most solid one.
Definitely agree, given the available material you’ve done a really nice job.
It’s one of the few parts of it that I’m not happy with how it’s turning out, but there just isn’t really the material to improve it. I really only cut like 3 lines of dialogue, there just isn’t much there to work with to begin with.
The other struggle with this edit is the pacing. By cutting Leia out of the movie, there’s not much to cut away to during the Pasaana/Kajimi stuff. So we essentially stay with the main trio almost in real time until after the fight on the death star.
It’s not necessarily a negative, but it does make for a breathless pace. Considering how fast paced the original is, it almost works better this way because it’s at least focused. We aren’t jumping around as much.