I made a first draft of the new crawl, let me know what you think.

It is a time of great change. Under the
supervision of Chancellor Palpatine and
the young Senator Padmé Amidala, the
Republic has successfully enforced Anti-
Slavery-Laws across the galaxy.

Sparked by these reforms, several solar
systems have left the Republic. Lead by
the mysterious Count Dooku, this
separatist movement made it difficult
for the limited number of Jedi Knights
to maintain peace and order.

Sent to investigate the vanishing of
Jedi Master Sifo Dyas, Obi-Wan Kenobi
followed a trace to the desolate Outer
Rim world of Geonosis…