I think you’re right. I love that Falcon shot form HAL’s edit, but it may not be fitting here particularly well.
I just updated it to make that change. It definitely works better. Eliminating the Falcon stuff make it a more powerful ending.
I like that much better. I’d even think about taking out the duplicate shot at 00:16-00:20 to keep from diluting the final shot impact in even the slightest way. Maybe drag the following shot back to start at 00:16 and either let it run the extra 4 seconds to cover?