Great to have you back!
I like the new crawls. One note is that I kind of worry that the audience might interpret “Luke’s faithful disciples” as Jedi students, even if the first sentence states that Luke is the last Jedi. Also, we never explore this idea of the village being loyal to Luke or the Jedi, beyond Lor San Tekka, so it might raise more questions than answers.
If you you don’t mind, I tried to make a few edits to your most recent take, using some suggestions from myself Sherlock.
The last Jedi has vanished. In his absence, a new Imperial remnant has risen to threaten the galaxy.
Descending into endless division, some members of the Republic Senate secretly call upon a daring RESISTANCE to find Jedi Master Luke Skywalker, convinced that he will restore the light of hope to the darkening stars.
Arising from its mysterious hidden base, the radical FIRST ORDER hastens toward a village on Jakku, determined to capture the key to finding Luke Skywalker before their enemy finds him first…
Anyway, I think it works fine regardless what you do! Like Sherlock said, it’s mostly pedantic changes.