You had mentioned a while back on the Ascendant thread that you weren’t a fan of TFA and TLJ capitalizing the same two words, and also that you wanted one of your ST crawls to have no capital letters to mirror how it is in the OT. I’ve been thinking this would be a good chance to tackle both things.

I feel that TLJ’s crawl works the best as the one cap-less crawl in the trilogy, and also fits the best with the tone of the movie, not to mention it’s a more direct mirror to TESB in the OT. And this would open up the chance to get some capital letters on TRoS’s crawl, which, as I also mentioned a while back, would fit a lot better there for both the crawl and the movie’s tone.

Also, one final nitpick (sorry), but I think it’s more important to establish the FO is pursuing military control over the galaxy. It makes it clear they’re a militant group and not a proper government. And Rey would then be expanding on it by specifying they’ll take over the major systems, rather that just repeating what we already know from the crawl.