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Post #1472472

Author
Anjohan
Parent topic
STAR WARS - EPISODE I - The Ancient Lore [V2] [IMPROVED Version]
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Date created
15-Feb-2022, 7:41 PM
Last modified
15-Feb-2022, 7:52 PM
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Anjohan
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I’m trying something on a whim here, and I am interested in whether this approach is working or not.

https://streamable.com/gov9qd

I am simply trying to create better conversations and some humour between Obi-Wan and Qui-Gon. I think the first portion works very well (up until “is going to be the death of me”), and the latter about 80%.

I’m trying to achieve a few things through this dialogue:

  • Obi-Wan is inpatient and a little whiny, much like most Padawans are (Anakin will be). But with decent humour and irony.
  • A little gab at the original film premise (diplomatic mission)
  • Obi-Wan hating the planet, that he will once end up living on
  • Qui-Gon trying to keep his Padawan’s mind focused on the Force and the ways of the Jedi.