I like that crawl. The middle paragraph could do with being split into multiple sentences to simplify it a bit, but the core of it is strong. I think the first paragraph is good.
Post #1471611
- Author
- CaptainFaraday
- Parent topic
- The Last Jedi: Legendary (Released)
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- https://originaltrilogy.com/post/id/1471611/action/topic#1471611
- Date created
- 10-Feb-2022, 4:14 AM