Oof, just spotted something else to amend what I’d just said-
Queen Amidala (the figurehead) is the macguffin, Padmé (revealed in the third act as the true Queen) is a character with real agency. This way you don’t reveal that Padmé is Queen until the right moment.
Perhaps-
The GALACTIC REPUBLIC is failing. As
its Senate becomes more complacent,
QUEEN AMIDALA, elected ruler of the
Naboo system, stands as a vocal champion
against corruption.With the Republic’s ability to protect
its worlds diminished, the greedy TRADE
FEDERATION have invaded her home planet,
in an attempt to force her compliance.The Jedi Order, mystical wielders of
THE FORCE and defenders of the Republic,
have dispatched Jedi Knight QUI-GON JINN
and his apprentice to bring the Queen to
safety on the capital planet of Coruscant.The key factions are the Galactic Republic (complacent, corrupt, unable to act), the Trade Federation (greedy, opportunistic), and the Jedi Order (protectors, mystical, act semi-independently of the Senate). The key characters are Queen Amidala (champion of democracy) and Qui-Gon (a Jedi Knight). The plot is escape from invasion.
You could perhaps do more with what the force actually IS, and that getting the Queen to Coruscant might actually help (beyond just escape), but I think early dialogue captures some of that.
This is a really good opening crawl. It conveys what it needs to and all the language and grammar sounds right, which is surprisingly tricky to accomplish - George Lucas was right when he said it’s like writing a poem.
I was trying to come up with something that started with just: “Invasion! The greedy Trade Federation have blah blah blah” but I couldn’t get it to work in that paragraph order.