PADME
we used to come here for school retreat. We used to swim
to that island every day. I love the water.
...We used to lie on the sand and
let the sun dry us... and try to
guess the names of the birds
singing.
ANAKIN
I don't know birds. I don't know anything about worlds where the creatures are pleasant-- and free. I like it here -- everything is soft and sooth.
That's definitely better than the original! However, I don't know....it still sounds a little cheesy. Which is why I'm going to try and maybe find a way so that Anakin doesn't talk at all. Padme's chattering, but that dies down as she realized Anakin's staring instead of talking. They both look at each other- something's clicked. "I love you", voices Anakin from the next scene, etc. I have to make that work, because I've thought about it and dramatically speaking, it's the best option.
I have a completely unrelated surprise coming up in the next day or two- I'm posting something on yousendit for your feedback. Just to show you I haven't been slacking off
Oh, and by the way, it was very nice of Hiochi to post the "Temple of Doom" soundtrack in the Memorabilia section, because there's a very specific short cue from that score that I had in mind for a very specific scene in SotDS- for a long time. But I'm not going to tell you where
