I also entirely disagree with the (seemingly fairly common) conception that balance is ‘greyness’, or that the Jedi should end - I think the Bendu in Rebels is a good critique of that kind of take on the Force (as is this dril tweet), and TLJ goes to great lengths to refute the idea that the Jedi are fundamentally flawed and can’t be fixed - but besides that I agree with a lot of the other stuff you wrote (the general badness of dogma is definitely one of the core messages in the PT and OT; Rey and Kylo’s whole ‘two sides of the same coin’ thing is my favourite part of the sequels; Rey being a Palpatine is less compelling etc.).

I like your dialogue trim ideas as well, though perhaps for not quite the same reasons (everyone, Luke especially, constantly mentioning the Jedi in this movie strikes me as the script overcompensating for TLJ, so shifting the focus of the Ahch-To scene more on to Rey feels more earnest). Having Rey’s triumph be an inversion of ‘I’m a Jedi [like my father before me!]’ rather than a repetition of it is certainly a fun idea too; even if I disagree with the reasons for it. Giving Rey more individual agency in the movie is refreshing.