The sentence mixing is really well done. The only one that stands out to me is “He’s worth a fortune to me” specifically because of the contrast with the first half of the line. If there’s a way to smooth it out, I think it’s very close to working.
“Star Wars Story” on YouTube uses some pitch correction (or slow down?), and I don’t hear any distortion, but it’s also a YouTube video in stereo: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=b08O9S-tKnE