Thanks Vranir as ever for the lovely detail. I’ll pore over those suggestions whilst re-watching the episodes, and see what fits. As before I think I swing a little more conservative than you on dialogue trims, but I definitely appreciate the focus your detail provides, it helps me mull these over further.

Artan, I was born in England (so maintain the accent) but have spent the last half of my life living in Scotland, which I love. I no longer consider myself English, with British being more technically correct, though I call myself Scottish wherever that’s accepted. Either way, I think it’s fine to use British/International English in my opening text, rather than American English where they differ. I’m sure the Americans amongst us can be comfortable that there exist alternative - but still valid - spellings for some of these words.

Burbin, I think I’m now falling on the side of trimming Bane recognising Anakin. My headcanon was that (1) Anakin’s a public figure, and/or (2) Bane’s done his research on the Jedi as part of his infiltration of the temple. But perhaps you’re right, it’s a little distracting.

Regarding Obi-Wan’s line, I agree, but I don’t think there’s anything I can do there. That scene has already been heavily butchered to carve it into a shape that’s passable. But even though it’s not delivered on, it’s an OK thing for him to think in the moment. Though perhaps that dialogue swap would soften it a little if I can find a “we’ll” in right tone.

That’s an interesting idea about trimming Bane’s short-lived infiltration. On the one hand it’s quite ballsy, which could add to Bane’s competence. But on the other, as you say, it’s a little absurd and redundant. Removing it would make the tradeoff that Anakin makes more impactful, which is the key emotional point of the episode. I’d be interested to know others’ thoughts on this.