My first time looking at this thread, and I’ve now caught up. Really enjoying what’s going on here.
Here’s a mockup of the hangar scene, using a combination of ideas from DominicCobb’s workprint and my previous mockup. I think “you will kill Palpatine” could sound better, but this was quick and dirty, so I just took it from Dom’s workprint as-is.
https://drive.google.com/file/d/14Qju_dgRTU7ABPhcyQ3wtIv8mXs6kB-t/view?usp=sharing
The “DARK POWER” line in this sounds so insanely natural, I was shocked. I love it. It works well to get this new dark side idea across. He says it with the perfect amount of umph to make the loud music swell and extreme Rey closeup actually work in a truly impactful way (compared to previous attempts on this thread from like over a year ago, imo.) So I really hope this can stay in a “finalized” version of this.
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Another thing I should mention is that I have some sort of strange obsession with Palpy’s “Luke Skywalker was saved by his father. The only family you have here… is me…” line.
Because even watching in the theater, I remember thinking about how that line could work in a Rey Nobody version of it. If she’s not related to him in this hypothetical, The Emperor would have been meaning it in an ominous formality type of way. Not literally. (As well as basically meaning not having anyone around to back her up, like Luke did (until Ben comes in to be Rey’s ‘Vader’ almost.) But you get the idea.)
I just really liked this line for that. Something that is so obviously talking about Rey Palpatine in the theatrical, but also could work just as well in a Rey Nobody version. My interest in seeing a Rey Nobody edit realized, lies heavily in how much one can drastically change the story with very minimal alterations. Being able to keep (almost) entire “Rey Palpatine” lines without her being literally related would just be so neat. At least to me, lol.
But hey, I’ll even settle for a happy middle ground. (I can understand why it doesn’t totally make literal sense to have him say that strange sentence in a Rey Nobody cut, lol. And if you’re someone who doesn’t have my weird fascination, then yeah… yeesh.)
Like, for example, I quite like the idea of cutting the line to where it’s simply “Luke Skywalker was saved by his father…The only family you have…” all ominously. (as has been mentioned before on a previous page. I think it works better conceptually than him literally saying “…is here.” But will have to maybe see which one works better in an actual edit.)
And then the camera pans up to look up at her “new family” getting helplessly attacked by the bad guys. That definitely works as well, albeit for a different than what I explained a paragraph or twelve ago. But still a strong (probably even stronger) reason. Especially with The Emperor referring to her friends up there as her new family again later in the scene. Keeping the line mostly intact, while also removing the slightly confusing way he phrased it. That works for me.
Point is; (jeez, as if it’s not clear enough) the more theatrical stuff still in this, the better, to me.