One thing I’m still curious about is the addition of the coda with Savage searching the galaxy. Does it work? Does it feel out of place? I wouldn’t add it back to the start of the Monsters episode (where Maul is rediscovered), so I think it belongs here if at all.
Serialized shows tend to end their episodes in a “hook” that makes you want to watch the next episode, I think this works really well in that regard as a stinger/tease of where this story will go next, Ventress mentions Savage at the begining so it fits to show him by the end. Children of Night ended with a Maul tease so it’s nice to aknowledge that thread and tease what’s to come.
The only thing that doesn’t feel right to me is that by the end of the Massacre™ Ventress sees Mother Talzin dissapear into an ethereal green cloud. That feels like a nice conclusion that leaves her fate ambiguous… but then the bit with Savage at the end ruins it by showing her again, hanging out somewhere. I think it’d be better to remove that and mantain Talzin’s fate ambiguous until she properly returns and heals Maul. Just cutting her out of that scene would be pretty straightforward, but you might want to mantain her dialogue to catch the audience up to speed on what Savage is up to, so I had an idea:
Now instead of seeing her again, we only hear her voice guide Savage. So it’s still ambiguous to what capacity she’s still around. Then perhaps it can be infered that she was left weakened after the battle, which is why she vanished, and it’s not until the return of Maul that we see her retake her corporeal form.