Feedback, based in part on further edits that I made. As said before, a lot of this is subjective, but if you find anything useful, feel free to copy it from my files or recreate it yourself.

Please do note the typo in the opening text for Resistance on Ryloth.

ASSASSIN

Trimmed some initial shots of the Jedi. Now we go from the ship exterior to her talking to the guard on the screen.
Cut some of the dialogue when the guard meets the clone outside the interrogation cell.
Trimmed some of Ahsoka’s threatening. It’s still there, but it’s faster and doesn’t call him a worm etc.
Made a few of small trims to tighten up the battle and boarding sequences.

THE 501ST

Cut part of the dialogue by the mercenary clone trainer. Cut clone requesting a transfer to another squad. Jumped straight from failure to Heavy getting out of his bunk. All of this was done to make the opening of the episode faster and more fluid.
Made small trims around the arrival of the commando droids to get them to the door faster and to reduce their chatter.
Trimmed out the rock worm (both appearances).
Trimmed a bit of dialogue between Grievous and a bridge droid to make them less goofy.
Trimmed another battle droid line when Heavy is sneaking around to reduce goofiness.
Removed some redundant and non-sequitor lines when Anakin, ObiWan, Rex, and Cody are talking about the need to defend Camino.
Moved Anakin’s line about pressing the advantage and re-added him returning to the planet to make the cut of underwater scenes with ObiWan sequence more naturally.
Trimmed a few lines when Fives and Echo are assigned sniper duty just to tighten the scene up.
Cut a few redundant scenes of troopers firing at droids and squid ships.
Trimmed some of the banter between Grievous and Ventress to make them a bit more direct.
Cut Anakin’s line about Ventress saying hi.
Cut the battle droid knocking on a door.
Cut two instances of Grievous recognizing ObiWan and calling him by name.
Trimmed a few more redundant combat shots.
Moved Greivous entering his escape ship to a slightly later point when it is more clear that they’ve lost.
Trimmed Ventress and Anakin lines about her being executed. Now she just says they probably want to capture her, but that’s not going to happen today.
Ended the episode on the eulogy for 99.

RESISTANCE ON RYLOTH

Typo in opening text: “defences” > “defenses”
Suggestion in opening text: “their newly established space blockade” > “a newly established space blockade”
Cut Wat Tambor strategy session after he says to target the villages. Cut scene of Twileks being marched out of the city. The scene is good, but the whole civilian-shield thing never becomes relevant in the actual battle.
Trimmed the Mace and troopers overlook scene after “which means they can’t be that far.”
Cut the close up shot of the lucrehulk bridge area. The first establishing shot of the whole ship seemed sufficient.
Cut a battle droid response when ordered to launch fighters.
Cut a few corny lines from Ahsoka and her pilots during the fight.
Trimmed down Ahsoka’s most directly disrespectful line to Yalaren.
Cut the establishing shot of the Venator after their retreat, along with Anakin’s initial dialogue with two clones. Instead, the scene opens with Ahsoka beside her fighter.
Made several trims to remove corny droid talk about older models. Now they just march past.
Cut the Nemoidian’s talk with Wat Tambor about Anakin. It wasn’t bad, but it seemed unnecessary, and the transition without it seemed to serve the story better.
Shortened the establishing shot of the Venators snd fighters preparing to depart.
Trimmed the battle droid repeating himself to the Nemoidian captain.
Made several small trims to make the collision faster.
Cut the dialogue about the droids taking a while to attack the Venator.
Ended the episode with Mace’s line “You’ve earned your freedom, general.”

THE DEATH WATCH

Suggestion in opening text: “While Senator… Its Death Watch radicals…” would get rid of two paragraphs in a row starting with “But.”
Trimmed the initial mention of an assassin by Dooku, in order to leave everything about their plot a surprise.
Trimmed the bit about only being a “friend” to slightly dial down the drama with ObiWan and Satine.