Trooperman:
Here is a revision of the scene that works for me and avoids the objectionable "I don't like sand" crap. This is from the script, not the movie, so there may be some discrepencies -- but if it's correct, would this work for you?
EXT. BALCONY -- NIGHT
ANAKIN and PADME stop at the balustrade. PADME looks out across the garden to the shimmering moonlit
lake and the mountains rising beyond. ANAKIN looks at her silently.
PADMÉ
When I was in Level Three, we used
to come here for school retreat.
See that island? We used to swim
there every day. I love the water.
ANAKIN
I do too. I guess it comes from
growing up on a desert planet.
PADME becomes aware that ANAKIN is looking at her.
PADMÉ
...We used to lie on the sand and
let the sun dry us... and try to
guess the names of the birds
singing.
He touches her arm. PADME has become receptive to the way he looks at her but is nervous.
PADMÉ
There was a very old man who lived
on the island. He used to make
glass out of sand - and vases and
necklaces out of the glass. They
were magical.
CUT ANAKIN DIALOGUE
PADMÉ
You could look into the glass and
see the water. The way it ripples
and moves. It looked so real...
but it wasn't.
ANAKIN
Sometimes, when you believe
something to be real, it becomes
real. Real enough, anyway...
They look into each other's eyes.
ANAKIN (V.O.)
I've loved you since... etc.
CUT TO:
INT. FIRESIDE -- NIGHT
Etc.