Not bad, but the display needs to add more to the scene. We need to see Luke adjusting his joystick and external shots of the fighter responding, between cuts to the display. As it stands is a bit static.
Also, the fighters maneuver slow on the external shots, medium on the cockpit shots, and fast on the computer display!
Shadows and rotations are consistent, nothing wrong there, but speed isn’t.I know I’m nitpicking, but I think you appreciate the input 😃
The Special Edition does have that sort of movement and we can see Luke controlling the craft on the cockpit shots.
I simply tried to copy the movement of the original shot, and I don’t think it’s particularly much difference in that and the new display (although it’s wider) but something I think I it may need is I slight tilt of x axis perspective on the tie fighter element I think that on the first one but on the second one it will stay as is.
Slowing it down a bit and using a bit less of that first shot might be a good call though… Good shout