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Post #1459441

Author
GLogus
Parent topic
The Clone Wars: Refocused [COMPLETE] + Subtitles for season one!
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Date created
24-Nov-2021, 10:06 PM

Hi. Just watched S01E02. Here are a few notes:

At 01:55 there is a single frame (of guns firing) that appears to be flipped. Not sure what would have caused this error. Blink and you’ll miss it, but it’s there.

At 01:57 I’d say the shot of Grievous laughing is too abrupt and out of context—probably because we have not been introduced to him yet.
Seems unnecessary, too.

At 06:36 the fade out/in is too quick to work, maybe a wipe would work instead?

At 19:46, another fade out/in feels strange. It feels like a TV show pausing for a commercial break, which I think runs contrary to the more cinematic feel you are going for.

Generally speaking, I almost wonder if the Plo Koon rescue could be shortened to serve more as a First Act (i.e., under 10 mins or so) to give your episodes more of a traditional three Act feel. Otherwise, it still has that feeling of simply stitching TV episodes together.

It’s possible that some of these things I’m referencing are present in the original source material. My disclaimer is that I’m not familiar enough with it to know, so keep that in mind.